first draft

you enter me like a storm,
rapture for the long bereft,
the barren and blocked,
glance and touch stirring
an equal cyclone in me.
I leave you in a ball
on the floor
by the bedside table,
used and then discarded.
traded for something
less tumultuous,
a more considerate lover,
a verb that caresses
its noun properly,
tenderly.
every one that follows
is less like you,
and I compare them all
because I remember you—
the way you came—
and I just might
want you back.
Labels: poem poetry
4 Comments:
Well done, lady. Well done.
10/02/2007 9:42 AM
Tiel Aisha Ansari and I, Mike McCulley, have created a 'poetry exchange' blog at Totally Optional Prompts , and you are invited to participate.
10/07/2007 9:11 AM
yay! I switched to Firefox finally and now I can read here without locking up my computer!
So-
Like this quite a bit. I always enjoy the hint or more than a hint at sexuality in poetry. Its a good form for it.
I'll come back with more when I'm not nursing (in like 6 months maybe).
10/12/2007 7:47 PM
I love your love of words.
10/26/2007 11:11 AM
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