reward
Poetry Thursday is endlessly rewarding. Not only are the writing prompts substantial, but the good results from among fifty or more poetic responses are ample.
This week's prompt was to use a line of poetry offered up by a Poetry Thursday participant. My inspiration is sharala's line about the snails. Thank you, sarala, for your generous gift. I hope you like how I've repackaged it.
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reward
few girls spent afternoons
huddled in the yard
crushing snails against stone*
smearing the bulbs of fireflies
on the pavement
multiplying the sun
against a defenseless ant
peeling off the wings
and legs of locusts.
but singly
for boys we liked
we would drop a worm
down our shirts
and contain the squirm
then go home and shiver
in the bathroom
repulsion tempered
by the reward
of sweet boy smile.
our perverse entomology
left on the playground
some boys still plot
against the weak
but girls have gotten better
at playing them
and though the reward
remains brief
sometimes we don't squirm
sometimes the worm
feels a little groovy.
*From Sharala's poem, "Tiara."
25 Comments:
I like the second stanza. :)
Great job, very different than my take.
1/17/2007 8:43 PM
Ah the memories of little boys. This is terrific.
1/17/2007 8:49 PM
ha! that is great! ha ha! the worm...
1/17/2007 9:22 PM
This is so charming. I love the close!
1/17/2007 9:32 PM
Groovy, indeed! Great job!
1/17/2007 9:56 PM
Loved this poem! Especially the first stanza. The image of these girls is perfect.
1/17/2007 11:28 PM
This is such a wonderful take on childhood cruelty and childhood sexuality. And all from one little line.
Cool.
1/17/2007 11:28 PM
Beautiful poem ... I learned what a "proem" is today in Shakespeare!
1/17/2007 11:42 PM
I like how you've repackaged it, and I bet the lender of the line will, too.
1/18/2007 1:20 AM
I enjoyed reading this!
1/18/2007 5:21 AM
I spent my time in a boy-free playground. We made daisy-chains, see? I love this, and that last line is absolutely great.
1/18/2007 6:44 AM
Your poems are always so sexy and insinuating in the most delicious way! A great example right here! Love this.
1/18/2007 8:39 AM
What a great re-package. The ending is "groovy", the reward for reading! This week is a lot of fun.
1/18/2007 1:45 PM
This is an awesome poem - I love the topic of how children learn about love and death by torturing insects (and sometimes, small animals! yikes!) You've handled it well here...nice work!
1/18/2007 2:31 PM
I like the viciousness of the opening images -- a very authentic and scary poem.
1/18/2007 4:10 PM
The beginning of this chilled me and made me cringe, but also made me remember. What an elegant ode to childhood.
1/18/2007 4:42 PM
Ha! And any poem that ends with "groovy" is just beyond cool. So smart, devious, and healthily subversive.
1/18/2007 7:23 PM
Oh haha. I love the ending! The whole poem is brilliant, but yes, the ending. Yum.
1/19/2007 12:17 AM
Oh haha. I love the ending! The whole poem is brilliant, but yes, the ending. Yum.
1/19/2007 12:17 AM
"And sometimes the worm feels a little groovy"
hehe. Amen.
Wonderful poem. Wonderful memories. Thank you.
1/19/2007 12:50 AM
Hi, back again. I used your line in my poem Call Me Destructive. Thanks. Hope you like it.
-Robin
1/19/2007 7:47 AM
your poems are so clever and also so perceptive. i love the use of groovy...
1/20/2007 6:54 PM
ps: i see i am not the only one who likes groovy! you are such a cool dude!
1/20/2007 6:57 PM
I agree with Shara and love the ending.
1/22/2007 8:24 AM
This is great! I love the transition from girls with real worms to women with...well, other kinds of worms. Very clever!
1/22/2007 2:25 PM
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