Dream Grrrrrl
This poem is dedicated to my crush, who has never known, all these years.
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One night, while you slept,
I captured your breath in my cupped hands,
mixed it with my own, liquored and licentious,
imbued our commingled air with incantations,
made a potion of it with all I had,
then rubbed it on your body
so I would be your dream girl,
and I was for twenty-five years
but you never knew the snarling wolf
who’s hunted you down a rain-slicked street,
past flashing motel lights,
was me.
for Poetry Thursday
8 Comments:
I like this. I like how it fits (incidently?) the suggested theme- who's avoidance? Was going to read mine in this morning, but the boss showed up early to sit in the next office and I got shy- thinking he'd think I was completely nuts. I'm glad you did it.
10/19/2006 7:58 AM
very nice, I enjoyed reading it and then hearing it, amazingly I had been working on a poem of the same vein, daydream lover, so it was fun to read your thoughts on the same..thanks..m
10/19/2006 8:33 AM
Very interesting. Love how you move from the lightness of the breath into the aggressive yearning of the snarling wolf... my crush lasted for years like that, too.
--Robin
10/19/2006 8:40 AM
This is good stuff. It brings up lots of visual images. I had a crush for a long time, and now he's mine. :)
10/19/2006 10:02 AM
I love the idea of breath as potion. I may just have to try it...
10/19/2006 12:39 PM
i knew it all along . i just played dumd --- your crush .
10/19/2006 3:56 PM
i had a lover i was so mad for i would swallow his exhalations when he slept...convinced that his brand of CO2 was medicinal. maybe it was.
10/22/2006 2:08 PM
OOOOOH!
Very nicely put. I'm in awe, again.
10/24/2006 7:07 PM
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